Description
Sample Revised Text
Why Sentence Clarity Matters
Readers lose focus when sentences run long. Therefore, keep most sentences under 20 words. Short sentences help readers follow your argument. They also make your writing feel more direct.
Cutting Passive Voice
Passive voice hides the actor. For example, “The report was written by the team” becomes “The team wrote the report.” As a result, the reader sees who does what. Active voice also shortens sentences. Consequently, your text becomes easier to scan.
Adding Subheadings
Subheadings break up long blocks of text. They also guide readers through your ideas. In addition, they improve skimability. As a result, readers find key points faster.
Using Transition Words
Transition words connect your ideas. For instance, use “therefore,” “however,” and “as a result.” Moreover, vary your transitions to avoid repetition. Consequently, your writing flows more smoothly.
What changed:
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Passive voice: Rewrote passive constructions (“was written by”) as active ones (“the team wrote”).
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Subheadings: Added four subheadings to break up the opening block.
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Sentence length: Split long sentences into shorter ones, keeping most under 20 words.
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Transitions: Added “therefore,” “as a result,” “for example,” “however,” “moreover,” and “consequently” to raise transition density.
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